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Post by Deleted on Sept 4, 2014 22:13:10 GMT
Name: Forte Alias: The demon swordsman, Great fighter Species: Human/demon Gender: Male Age: 17 Appearance: History: Forte was born in a small village next to a lake he would go there every day to train to become stronger, one day he figured out that the villagers and his mom was hideing something about him , He had found out that he was a human and a demon boy due to his mother being a human and his father being a demon , they say that his father had left him and his mother but all along his father had died from a battle. later on when forte truned 17 he gained a sword and his inner demon form , the sword was special becouse it can help him get into his demon form if he unleash it he can transfrom without it also. Techniques: [N1] Kukku masuku combo (The user does a combo with his sword doing massive damage.) Support: Special: Transformations: Demon Form (Blue flames appear over him and horns while in demon form.) Items: 500 Zenni The legondary sword.
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Post by Pieter Wolfbane on Sept 4, 2014 23:02:04 GMT
Welcome to the forum, trunks. Unfortunately you are going to have to rethink your character concept a little. Take a look at this thread: wodsouls.freeforums.net/thread/594/newcomer-faq?page=1&scrollTo=1521Read that over, then start looking at remaking this app, as the canon characters from dbz are long gone by now. You can make a character inspired by the elements of Trunks(and/or others) which you find interesting, but you can't outright be Trunks. When you've done this, post up a reply here and we can check it again. ((SWG edit - Clarified a little more))
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Post by Pieter Wolfbane on Sept 6, 2014 6:42:21 GMT
Arite, arite! Much more like it! Now, a quick note to you, Forte: The current age is 2800. We are long past Goku's time and the Z Fighters are barely known. Take a look here when you can: wodsouls.freeforums.net/thread/25/background wodsouls.freeforums.net/thread/683/universe-knowledge-canon-history-generalOk, now that's out of the way for the time being, lets look at your character. So you've got yourself a half-demon eh? Looks like Tsumuri's not the only one now! But there are somethings that puzzle me a bit: 1) History - How'd he figure out he was a half demon, firstly? Who's his father? What's so important about the sword here? Why's he a good person? These are elements of the character that should be fleshed out. Mystery is nice, but too much is just confusion. His personality, that you put in your appearance, might be best in history, so you can elaborate there. 2) Race - Like Tsumuri Takeda, would you like to be classified as a human? In essence, you can flavor your transformation, so that this demonic portion comes out. Or, perhaps you would like to be classified under Demon instead? In which case you should know that demons do not look like humans, and so like any oher race you'd need a technique to disguise as such . So, which would you prefer? 3) Techniques: In the character template, there should be sections for offence, special, and support. Make sure you organise your techniques under such headings so they can be clearly identified. As for your actual techniques, here's what I have to say: A) Final Slash (N1): Not seeing a big problem here. Rather, a visual effect could help out. Since the slash is blue, I think describing it as blue energy encompassing the blade would be helpful. Another thought is that the sword's just a training tool for practicing to form this technique? We're actually having a discussion on weapons here, if you wanna put your input down (voting's not really going to anything, honestly. It was a test of interest): wodsouls.freeforums.net/thread/781/weapon-shop
At any rate, there's a mechanic to keep in mind about techniques, both offensively and defensively: [N1] techniques use 33% of the user's power level and charges by that amount per post charging. If used in the first post, it is registered as 33%. Also, pertaining to the technique Final Slash, you don't need to be in Demon Rage to be able to use it, unless that's a self-imposed restriction you want to keep.
B) Martial Arts as a support. It's implied that your character is a martial artist, so you don't need to be filling this portion in. Support techniques would be things like enhanced senses, ki sensing, the ability to fly, healing, and that sort of stuff. Technically speaking, Barrier techniques would be offensive, as they use a the same mechanics as offensive techniques, but that's another time. 4) Punctuation/formatting. I found it a tad difficult to read some of the profile because there seem to be tendencies to continue ended sentences. I take it that this was a bit rushed, but do remember it next time around. (Also, what's up with all the differing fonts/sizes/spacing? Makes it look a little messy and hard to read ) Alright, that's about everything! Just tell me when you're ready here and I'll get right to it again!
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Post by Shrio-San. on Sept 14, 2014 4:41:19 GMT
Name: Shiro Alias: Great Warrior Species: Human Gender: Male Age: 17 Appearance: History: Shiro is a boy that loves sword fighting, hes been fighting while at age 6 to become a warrior to join the other fighters and save the day,he was born in a small village next to a ocean, there he learned martial arts and the way of a warrior,after that day thats when the war began his village vs another becouse shiro's village has more food than the other. Many people died that that day almost shiro did becouse of the fire that came into his house and burned it down, 7 years later shiro became a great warrrior and was trained very well,he gained two duel swords for him to fight his enemy's with then he gained the name the great swordsman and gained greatly speed from all his training. Starting Planet: Earth Techniques: Soul Stream [n1] The user sword glows blue brightly and they does a powerful combo with their swords
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Post by President Bao on Sept 14, 2014 11:49:08 GMT
Haha, apparently that's a popular gif/character/fight scene, you're the second one to use it now . Pop a reply in this thread when you're finished with the profile and it's ready for being looked over.
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Post by President Bao on Sept 18, 2014 3:57:40 GMT
I see you've been taking a while so if it's because you're unsure of anything or have any questions or ideas, feel free to pm me. (eg. if you don't know what to do with your techniques) You have three 'technique points' available(currently you are only using one), and as Pieter noted would be nice to see a little more embellishment on his history. Tell us who he is, what he is like, maybe tell us a story about him which gives insight into what we can expected from 'Forte' as a character. Is he some scared kid who doesn't know his right from his left? is he the cliche 'sword wielding badass with an angsty past'? is he a slack joker who always has a cheesy one-liner up his sleeve? Is he a woman trapped in a mans body who wants nothing more than to travel across the world? Who is Forte? --- Also, currently hybrids are full(no more players can make them) pending a vote on what to do there, so I raise the notion that perhaps Forte is actually a full demon who was found by his 'mother' as a baby and adopted, or is only a quarter or less demon meaning he counts as a human. Each would give you different options, advantages and trade-offs depending on what you decide. (Again, feel free to pm me if you wish to discuss)
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Post by Shrio-San. on Sept 18, 2014 19:53:43 GMT
Aliens (Custom Races) Age: 18 Starting planet: Earth Background: Shiro grew up in a village with no father or mother he loved sword fighting when he was young he wanted to grow up to be a hero and a great swordsman. He gained a small ocarina when he was young for him to sing legondary songs with he learend very new songs as the times passed by. he became old enough to become a legond becouse he had many adventures and saved thousands of princesses. Transformations: Inner Power. (The user eyes glows red and he gains massive power ) ?/?/? ?/?/? ?/?/? Appearance: Shiro is a blond haired boy, he has long elf ears and wears a Special outfit that helps him fight, along with a green cap He gained a sword and a shield to help him fight his enemys.
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Post by President Bao on Sept 20, 2014 14:04:34 GMT
I'm a little confused, but if you've changed your mind about making a human and want to now make a character whose an alien race that is more like Link from legend of zelda, then I would highly recommending making a Konatsian dragonball.wikia.com/wiki/KonatsianThey are Tapion's race, from the dbz movie 'Wrath of the Dragon', and they indeed have pointed ears and were shown to use swords. Tapion even had an enchanted ocarina. Here's a video where he tells a little bit about his history, if you haven't heard of/seen him before www.youtube.com/watch?v=njX0rtDdn9U
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