The majin stood over the man for several minutes, wondering what to do. Finally, she knelt down, grasping the man's torso and lifting him. She took flight, bearing her opponent towards North Capitol so that he could receive medical attention, something it looked like he sorely needed.
Post by Pieter Wolfbane on Nov 8, 2016 6:51:57 GMT
Famalle: 930 power level gained. 1564 > 2494 Note to you, Collan (and this does seem to be a trend with all characters)- Emphasize some detail to your partner, or to yourself, even! Sometimes, if you want to do better, you have to figure out the setting and what's occurring to your character. It's a painful process, and even if it may seem 'terrible' to you, you'll more than likely find some better interactions, which'll ramp up the direction and depth of your characters!
Sundavr Andlat: 466 zeni gained. 2216 > 2882 Note to you, to help you improve- Look at how you're using your grammar punctuation and how long you're keeping your sentences. Read the sentences out loud and see how you're expressing them. See if you could also express more detail in your writing, as detail helps your partner bounce off yourself and carry threads for a more lengthy period of time.