broc
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Post by broc on Sept 13, 2016 0:02:06 GMT
OK rewrote the story
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Nicolas Mclendon
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The Hero of the Cosmos: CAPTAIN NOVA!
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Intense Struggle (x3); X-Factor (x6); Amazing Captain Nova (x16)
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Post by Nicolas Mclendon on Sept 13, 2016 7:58:14 GMT
Expand the history it's too short.
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broc
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Post by broc on Sept 13, 2016 23:44:54 GMT
OK added some things and some more motivation for future roleplays
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Nicolas Mclendon
Moderator
The Hero of the Cosmos: CAPTAIN NOVA!
PL: 145,482
Intense Struggle (x3); X-Factor (x6); Amazing Captain Nova (x16)
Zeni: 2336
Tag: @nicolas
OOC Name: Nicolas
Posts: 1,010
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Post by Nicolas Mclendon on Sept 21, 2016 7:01:11 GMT
His abilities are messed up, Zanzoken is a dodge move. Appearance needs to be expanded. History is rife with grammatical and spelling errors.
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