Gelid
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Post by Gelid on Sept 21, 2016 23:47:23 GMT
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Nicolas Mclendon
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The Hero of the Cosmos: CAPTAIN NOVA!
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Intense Struggle (x3); X-Factor (x6); Amazing Captain Nova (x16)
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Post by Nicolas Mclendon on Sept 30, 2016 1:35:32 GMT
>For timeline's sake you need to add 300 years to his age
>His hair color needs to be one or the other. Genetics don't work that way.
>The character's history makes no sense. Ignoring the blatant deus ex machina ship, I cannot fathom why the father would knowingly create a Tuffle Saiyan Hybrid then freak out about it's saiyan biology and send it into space after spending all the time and care to create him. It's like you're trying to design a character around why he's got the random combination of genetics rather than using it as a tool to make an interesting character. Also, I'm not buying the comet cryofreeze thing. Why would a caravan try to land on a speeding comet in order to get the pod? It'd be nearly impossible for it to land on it. Also, the 14 year old tyrant schtick is pretty Mary Sueish (and something I refuse to accept at all.) I don't understand how a frozen baby could grow up to be militant strategist without proper training or even an education (not to mention you're probably going to start with like 3,000 power level so it makes no sense why he'd be some sort of emperor.) Him having a turf war rivalry with the arcosians won't fly either. This doesn't end up mattering though because he gets frozen AGAIN only to be thawed out again randomly.
If you absolutely need to be a Saiyan/Tuffle hybrid have him start off in hell or something. Maybe he was the result of an affair between a saiyan and a tuffle before the war came about and after the war he was persecuted by the saiyans for his mixed heritage.
Right now you're trying to set up a character with a lot of unwarranted self importance when he's gonna start off at what is basically level 1.
>You only start with 3 Technique slots
>If you want to be a tuffle hybrid you need to apply for a Tuffle Race Page.
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Gelid
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Post by Gelid on Oct 3, 2016 1:49:07 GMT
Could this thread be taken down?
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