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Post by Orenji on Nov 29, 2017 7:16:20 GMT
Name: Blueberry // Kabocha (Alternative version of Kabocha who was originally a fox but somehow through God's miracle he was created as a blue bear) Home Universe:Universe 2 Appearance: 8'0ft , 300lb Species: Zoan Gender: Male Age: 24 League Tier: Middle League History:Blueberry isn't the brightest zoan bear in the world. He was considered a rejection not only through Earth school but everywhere else he went. Blueberry doesn't know the basic of anything. He only speaks in one word responses. Though what he lacks in mentality, his strength is what people fear. A mysterious wizard from behind the scenes took control of Blueberry and thus signed him up in the tournament, ultimately believing that he is the strongest in the universe with his raw power. Techniques:[N1] PUNCH [UP2] SUPER PUNCH [MP3] DU PA PUNCH [N1] DODGE [UP2] SUPER DODGE [MP3] DU PA PUNCH [N1] BLOCK [UP2] SUPER BLOCK [MP3] DU PA BLOCK [UT] FLY? NO, JUMP HIGH! [UT] WHERE HE GO? - (flavor version of Ki sense) [UT] CAN'T SEE ME! - (flavor version of Ki suppression)
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Post by Capper Hofferson on Nov 30, 2017 0:43:00 GMT
Gonna need another overhaul here. Edits needed are as following: - This might be the joke universe, but it is not a ticket to do whatever you want. "Blueberry", from name to background, is indistinguishable from Kabocha. The point of an AU character- even the funny ones, are the "what if" branching scenarios that are clear and reasonable. Being born as a blue bear does not fulfill this. Give him more discernable, branching similarities to his canon so I can look at the two and go "Oh hey, this is an AU of Kabocha", instead of "Is this a new character?", and we are good. Expand heavily on history and the branch that made this Kabocha the Kabocha he is. Why did the wizard take control of him? How? How did Blueberry/Kabocha devolve into a dullheaded bear or fox? How and why did he get so powerful? I have many questions.
- Techniques need descriptions, and dodges have to be [SU1-SU3] tiered. YYyyyyup, not much else to say here.
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